Last Date
August 25, 2010 at 4:15 pm 22 comments
They stepped out of the Mercedes holding hands,
He thought, even after 15 years she looked as stunning as she did on their first date,
She wondered if he sensed she was wearing his favourite fragrance Chanel No. 5,
They walked to the chamber and signed on the documents,
Their last as husband and wife.
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Charan | August 25, 2010 at 4:18 pm
Way to go…
Awesome start…!!!
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delhizen | August 25, 2010 at 4:30 pm
thanks man! you got me try my hand at it after all
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Mayur | August 25, 2010 at 4:21 pm
Good One…
Actually it is a tight slap for people like me who write long stories
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delhizen | August 25, 2010 at 4:29 pm
aww pls…I am a founder member of your fan club, so nothing against yr stories
and thanks, glad you liked it!! means a lot coming from you
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Mayur | August 25, 2010 at 4:31 pm
Red & White is already under way. I’m writing part 6 today.
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S.R.Ayyangar | August 25, 2010 at 4:49 pm
Nice write up with anti climax.
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Prateek | August 25, 2010 at 6:49 pm
Interesting. A tweet on a blog and a story in the tweet. This post is to blogging what Haiku is to poetry.
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ray of light | August 25, 2010 at 8:57 pm
pretty good! bt i wna know what next, its almost frustratingly interestng!!
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ranjith boyanapalli | August 26, 2010 at 10:15 am
Perfect 55 pallavi…great start i would say…nice context and an apt shock at the end ! I like the way you didnt try to pack too much story, but jus played rightly with the words….very polished and clean.
Keep writing !
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Sapna | August 26, 2010 at 10:58 am
Nice twist and Amazing style!!! Short and Crisp. Loved it
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d_minor | August 26, 2010 at 12:06 pm
why, why would the man want to leave this woman if he still remembers what she looked 15 years back… why would she let this man go if she wears his fav perfume, there just has to be more to this… This is just too heart breaking…
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aniruddha pathak | August 26, 2010 at 12:43 pm
wow i liked this one..is that a 55er?
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Charan | August 26, 2010 at 1:02 pm
Heya Aniruddha,
Your 55ers has been my inspiration man and I ve started my 55ers too…way to go man.. ur 55ers rock!!!
Charan
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delhizen | August 26, 2010 at 1:21 pm
ROL & Minor- now- now, don’t expect a long story to know what lead to the outcome of this 55er!
Patty, Sappy, RB; really happy that you all liked my play with limited words!
@ Aniruddha; glad you liked it and yeah you made me recount the words
… Its 55 & no more!
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Karan Agrawal | August 26, 2010 at 3:55 pm
Awesome! Cool! Short punchy… liked it!
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Sahithi Pallavi | August 26, 2010 at 9:03 pm
Interesting! Nice!
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Kartikay | August 28, 2010 at 12:34 am
“55 words and no more” – what an amazing concept. I don’t care who started it, you must keep this up!
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delhizen | August 28, 2010 at 11:41 am
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delhizen | August 28, 2010 at 11:40 am
Thankyew Karan & Pallavi
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tangyorangesour | August 28, 2010 at 6:57 pm
you just set your standards sky high!
now i gotta see how the moon looks like
very nice
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just a thought.. i was listening to this as i read…though it has no significance.. but it has similar emotions..
give it hear..
eminem – love the way you lie ft. rihana… look it up on youtube..got a nice video
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flawsophy | September 3, 2010 at 11:21 pm
sleek one !!!
the guy has a favorite women fragrance ? … sign the docs and get the hell outta there …
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delhizen | September 4, 2010 at 3:08 pm
Aww.. don’t find a ‘flaw’ here too! anyway at least you liked the concept!