Wine Seller

August 27, 2010 at 3:39 pm 12 comments

He guided her to a corner table,

Offered her a glass of wine, her first ever,

As she sipped an uneasy expression surfaced on her face,

Was it the wine or his touch from underneath, he thought,

She looked away and rose to leave,

Turned back and said this is not my cup of tea!

(conceptualized & written by Delhizen trimmed by Charan)

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Entry filed under: 55 words & no more.

Last Date Mumbai- City of Dreams

12 Comments Add your own

  • 1. Prateek  |  August 27, 2010 at 4:15 pm

    Interesting and good play of words. But if I may add, the previous one was more catchy.

    Reply
    • 2. delhizen  |  August 27, 2010 at 4:16 pm

      Thanks Pats! I am just experimenting and trying to learn a new way to narrate stories! 🙂

      Reply
  • 3. Karan Agrawal  |  August 27, 2010 at 11:05 pm

    This one is cool too! I like the climax which leaves reader for interpretation… Good going!

    Reply
    • 4. delhizen  |  August 28, 2010 at 11:43 am

      🙂

      Reply
  • 5. Raju Bist  |  August 28, 2010 at 10:32 am

    Wonderful!
    You handle verse as well as prose…
    Can I use it as a guest post on my blog?
    Cheers!
    RB

    Reply
    • 6. delhizen  |  August 28, 2010 at 11:43 am

      of course! you can 🙂

      Reply
      • 7. RB  |  August 28, 2010 at 7:00 pm

        Which byline – Delhizen or real name? 🙂
        Cheers!

  • 8. tangyorangesour  |  August 28, 2010 at 6:50 pm

    Haha… Now I’m use this to impress people around

    Reply
  • 9. Phoenixritu  |  August 30, 2010 at 11:44 am

    Wow! Wonderful, you have an impressive style of writing

    Reply
    • 10. delhizen  |  August 30, 2010 at 2:03 pm

      Hey! thanks :)! Keep visiting.

      Reply
  • 11. Gaurav  |  September 4, 2010 at 11:05 am

    So much said in so few words!! Great post!! 🙂

    Reply
    • 12. delhizen  |  September 4, 2010 at 3:07 pm

      Hey Thanks Gaurav!

      Reply

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